Peer Feedback of my reflections

 Peer Feedbacks

1: Mary Jane Skopakow's feedback on my reflections - Stanford Method

Hi Davina! Your reflection on the impact that technology has on us was great, and I especially liked how you were able to seamlessly integrate your own past and future experiences as a student and pre-service teacher, respectively, into your piece. I noticed that in your second paragraph you use quotation marks for "zoom fatigue", I do believe it should be changed to an apostrophe. The only other thing that I would wish you would change is for your third paragraph to include more literature. You talk a lot about the implications that new technology has had on our mental health, which is a very big topic of discussion as of late, so there would be many journals exploring this. So what if you try to back-up the content in this paragraph using the peer-reviewed research that others have completed, which will give your reflection a lot more substance and meaning to other readers? Overall, great job!

2: Chantelle Radan's feedback on my reflections

I like how your ideas flowed throughout the reflection with your desire for teaching being clear through your explanation. I like how you utilised various sources of evidence to support your reasoning which included the correct in-text citations. I like how the evidence selected included short and concise statements that were explained effectively and connected to answering your driving question. In addition, I like your use of anecdotes which further enhanced your writing and how you drew upon your emotions to strengthen your points. I wish that you would spend a little more time varying your sentence structure as some of the sentences were lengthy and could have been worded a little different. What if you summarised your main points and combined them to allow for a better flow of information in each paragraph. What if you also included the year of the publication of the Washington Post article to ensure that it is cited correctly

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